tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2143544841266799337.post5643937078756726653..comments2023-12-25T04:28:12.868-06:00Comments on Yellow Dog Patrol: A Dog Named Blitz - Chapter One: "The Beginning, the End" Part OneUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2143544841266799337.post-14256283734199229452009-07-20T16:05:46.704-05:002009-07-20T16:05:46.704-05:00lol @ ur cuz! i like the story so far. just starte...lol @ ur cuz! i like the story so far. just started. you're missing "of the" in the 2nd pp. i love the first 2 para's. more like that! not so much first this, then this. more of a picture building. off to read the next one...<br /><br />--Lea & Riley the speckled mutt. visit us at http://rileysdogblog.blogspot.comLea Munleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08110684437542743773noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2143544841266799337.post-12500233230483290772009-06-01T13:38:35.699-05:002009-06-01T13:38:35.699-05:00You say you want criticism so I'll be happy to obl...You say you want criticism so I'll be happy to oblige. <br /><br /> In order to make this believable or more realistic, unless you are going for a sci-fi or even artistic interpretation of events angle, you really need to state that the reason you didn't shoot was due to the fact it wasn't a hen or the bird didn't roost/perch up in a tree. No one that knows you is buying the whole I didn't shoot angle. Come on Cuz. I watched you empty 2 boxes of shells in 3 hours this last jan. <br /><br />You didn't shoot! ha ha ha ha ha!!!chris Murphyhttp://yankeesux.comnoreply@blogger.com